If you're here looking for Lady Gwen's Judge & Jury Blogest, it's directly below this Challenge.
Here we go with the first challenge set by Rachael Harrie.
Mine's a contemporary piece!
The door swung open, as though beckoning her to greet the morn. Raw scent of man replaced by salty air drifted through her cliff-top cottage. He was gone, but he’d be back. They always came back if she wanted them to.
How strange, though, that the sound of the sea crashing on the cliffs seemed closer than usual, almost surreal, as though swirling beneath her. True enough, pilot officer Brett Master’s had made the ground move all right, and maybe this time she might hang around longer than just for the weekend.
She smiled, the local lovesick barmaid leapt to mind, whom, according to village gossip a bit of a witch on the side. Funny really, the silly girl had cast an evil eye in their direction and mouthed some whispered curse as they’d made to leave. They’d naturally laughed and left the pub arms about each other.
She stretched cat-like, languidly slid from the bed and walked naked toward the door.
The lawn, the road . . . What?
The ground had moved: moved for real.
Shiiiiiit.
She stood there, nothing beneath but swirling water, and Brett gone for good, no doubt about it.
The cottage was teetering on the edge of the cliff, and suddenly the door swung shut behind her.
To see entries by other participants go here.
39 comments:
That was great! Nice ending. I love the image you created.
Oh no! The ending is quite gripping and leaves me wanting more. Great job!
Oh wow. Edge-of-the-seat stuff at the end! Well done!
brilliant! hi fro afellow campaigner...number 62 in the list x
This was quite interesting. Totally different perspective on the same prompt. I liked her musings before she realized what had actually happened...Nicely worded. ~ Nadja
That's an excellent take on the subject!
I really enjoyed the read Francine. As usually you kept tension towards the end and really made me want to know what happens next!
Delicious, delicious.... I want more....lol
Brill! What happens next?
Hi ladies,
Thanks for stopping by, I'm having a job keeping up with everyone! ;)
If I haven't stopped by your blog, yet, I will in the next day or so. Promise!
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F
Uh Oh! that's not good, is it? Nice job. I'm #72
Love this! You ramped up the tension wonderfully and now I'm dying for more :)
Hi Francine. Great read from start to finish. She got her comeuppance eh? D
Cliffhanger for sure, both figuratively *and* literally;)
Oh, NICE job!!! Don't mess with witchy barmaids :)
I never expect your endings! Beware the evil eye.
Never laugh at the local witch... though, if there's a witch, can it still be considered contemporary?
Goodness is the house about to slip down the cliff?
I love this line: 'She stretched cat-like, languidly slid from the bed and walked naked toward the door'.
Francine, that was a tantalizing piece. No, not the heroine, your submission. It left me intrigued to find out how it all turns out for her.
This is awesome Francine. I loved it.
Ooh I love it - I want to read more :)
loved it...wish it dint end so soon...:)
Nice! So unexpected. Need to know more.
Hi Francine, this is a fascinating piece of flash fiction but it's over 200 words. I was the allotted judge for your work and I'm afraid I'm not allowed to consider any pieces that are over 200. Even cutting out the three dots (which each count as a word the way you've typed it) it's still 10 words over the 200. So sorry about this but thought you'd like to know for future reference.
Hi Guys and Gals,
Thanks for stopping by to comment. If I haven't reached you yet, I'll be along shortly!
Hi Rosalind, yes, I know, over word count. Truth is, I'm in the campaign for the fun not the winning as such! ;)
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F
Nice piece. I enjoyed reading it. I'm a fellow campaigner.
Dear Francine,
Wow! What a story! Talk about a real 'Heart-Stopper'! You have taken the term 'cliff-hanger' to a new dimension! And every word is weighed with care!
Impressive!
Thank you for your advice about my H-S-text. You are, of course, right. It's time to get my protagonists together.
Best wishes,
Anna
For the benefit of other readers:
Anna's RFW No. 17 'Heart-Stoppers'
I guess that barmaid was more than a bit of a witch if she moved the whole house! :-) And like Anna said, great use of the literal meaning of cliff-hanger.
Great ending
Leaves me wanting more, that's for sure. Very cool.
nicely done Francine. How is she going to get out of this one??!
What a cliff hanger...loved it!!
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Bummer about the word count Francine, but it was fun wasn't it?
D
Hi ladies, and thanks all for stopping by to comment.
Hi D: It's not about competing for a win, not for me. You know I can cut-it on word count if I want to. But, my participation is merely for the fun of it all.
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F
Nice cliffhanger! Great job! :D
This is wonderful! I'm finally getting around to follow everyone in my historical fiction group. I'll look forward to reading this blog.
Hi Katie and Angelina,
Thanks for stopping by. I'll be checking to make sure I've dropped in to your blogs ASAP.
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F
I dig that ending! Over the cliff she goes...
Hi Alex,
Looks like it, don't it? Done for! :o
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F
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