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My contribution to the Romantic Friday Writer's Challenge.
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“Not bad, not bad at all. Legs up to their . . .” Momentary
silence befell them, while Danny eyed the The Lollipops, the girls who were
gigging at the pub. “Should have come here before . . . Why haven’t we?”
“Dunno, but the
girls said to meet ’em here tonight,” replied Ginger, eyeing a new arrival
shimmying toward the bar. “Get a load of that.”
Danny swung round,
beer swilling from his glass. “Oh shit.”
Tom burst out
laughing. “Am I seeing things?”
“Like what,”
groaned Danny, a wet patch in his groin area. “Jeez, that’s all I need.”
Ginger glanced at
Danny’s predicament, and roared with laughter. ‘Classic, mate. A sure sign of
wet Lollipop dream. They’ll love you.”
“Hey guys,”
intoned Tom, eyes glued to the newcomer. “You sure you wanna hang out here?”
“Yeah, why?”
Ginger followed Tom’s line of vision. “Ah, see what you mean.”
Danny turned in
his seat, his foot catching that of a Lollipop girl: the trio making toward the
podium. “Sorry about that, didn’t . .
.”
Bright blues locked
onto his, and Danny sensed . . . No, felt the vibes going through his body.
Whoa, this couldn’t be happening.”
“Hey sugar,” said
blue-eyed Lollipop, deep rasping voice akin to that of an old movie star he’d
seen on TV and kind of sexy with it, “come and see me later, after the gig.”
Once again silence
befell them as the Lollipops strolled past on skyscraper heels.
“I’m out of here,”
said Ginger, getting to his feet.
“Too late,” said
Tom, “the girls just walked in.”
Danny glanced
toward the door, Jenny having spotted their table and waving as though not
having set eyes on him in weeks. Love’s young dream, and Jenny as remote from a
Lollipop girl as that of . . .Damn it, why had the girls selected this pub for
an anniversary do?
“Oooh, big boy,”
she said, slipping onto his knee, a kiss to lips as the Lollipops burst into
song. “Missed me?”
“Not yet, I’m still
trying on that score.”
She puckered her
nose. “Great here, in’t it?” she said, addressing her best mates, his best
mates girlfriends. “Different. Like kind of funnnnn different.”
Charlene, Ginger’s
girl said, “Yeah, and those Lollipops in’t half got some balls to stand up
their in them there skimpies.”
Sharon, Tom’s girl
burst into laughter, said, “Big girls, in’t they. Like tall, tall.”
Charlene started
giggling. “Oh Danny, if you could see your face.”
He laughed. “Come
here.” The kiss potent, driven by lust, edged with guilt. “I love you.”
“I know you do,”
said Jenny, semi-breathless, “but what brought that on?”
“Nothing, just saying.”
Ginger laughed.
“Happy Anniversary mate.” He raised his glass. “To all of us, one year down and
two days to go to your big day.”
“Thanks, Ging,”
said Jenny. “Stag and Hen do in one is more fun, don’t you think? And guess what
. . . Danny boy, you’re going to get to sing with the Lollipops.”
“No way,” said
Danny, hefting Jenny from his lap. “No bleeding way I am getting up there and
singing along with trannies.”
“Danny.
Wait.”
Ginger
laughed, got to his feet and raised his glass. “Bad move, Jenny, bad move.”
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Hee hee, over word count if it's 400 for today's challenge. And believe it I penned this over lunch. OK: to see other participants in this picture prompt go here.
12 comments:
Hey F, you're a bloomin' genius to have penned this over lunch. Right ripper 'tis an all. Live the voices. Spot on. What fun! I felt I was there.
BTW Word Count is 600 today.
Great post. Have a great weekend.
Denise
Dear Francine,
Your word count according to WordCalc http://www.wordcalc.com
is 546, which is perfect for this.
You did this over lunch? Well that shows what a pro you are! I never write that fast. Well, I can sometimes get ideas fast, but there are always so many typos. And some words I simply do not know how to spell. (Hate to admit it, but it's true.)
Lots of fun atmosphere here. It feels like the haphazardness of a night out with young people. Fits the picture too. You have followed the instructions well and still written a text has your vibrant style. And your characters talk! You've got them chatting away, as young people do when they are out having a good time. I think I need to send my characters to a speech therapist!
Best wishes,
Anna
Anna's RFW challenge 35
Lollipops, totally perfect. Good use of dialogue to reveal the setting, and atmosphere. This made me smile, especially the last line.
Thanks for joining in this week.
......dhole
Hello Francine.
I can't believe you came up with this over lunch...I agonized for days over mine! The language made me smile too...it's how both my brothers-in-law sound...they live in London. Nice read. Thanks for sharing.
Last Dance
Hi Francine
Ohh...tantalizing and so different. The language was perfect and unusual for this American. I love the name, 'Lollipops.' Well written, it captured me from the first.
Nancy
Hi
Thanks for stopping by, Anna.
The prompt spoke! ;)
best
F
Hi Andy,
Yes, one can hardly hear oneself in a UK pub, especially a boy type pub: though this one had a twist... ;)
best
F
Hi Nancy,
Thanks ever so for stopping by. I know, those wigs just got me thinking men in drag! ;)
best
F
LOL. Poor Danny. Another clever use of the image prompt. Love it. Well done, Francine.
Hi Kiru,
Yep, poor Danny...Though a hint of something he wasn't expecting! ;)
best
F
Hi F. Just popped by for another giggle. D.
You're welcome!
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